tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1900399548762721089.post7881016025248059795..comments2010-03-18T23:55:56.715-07:00Comments on C.C.s creative corner + other stuff: Shattered GlassC.C.http://www.blogger.com/profile/14765352770428354280noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1900399548762721089.post-55181599291838443892010-03-15T14:10:05.196-07:002010-03-15T14:10:05.196-07:00Random, post is randomRandom, post is randomC.C.https://www.blogger.com/profile/14765352770428354280noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1900399548762721089.post-36822293484068863422010-03-14T16:37:57.204-07:002010-03-14T16:37:57.204-07:00Hey I didn't know you liked Britney Spears. I ...Hey I didn't know you liked Britney Spears. I like her too. (:Jehsssshttp://myanimelist.net/profile/Bounoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1900399548762721089.post-56973094099697293762010-03-05T14:40:31.220-08:002010-03-05T14:40:31.220-08:00Seems like you have a good plot going here, but yo...Seems like you have a good plot going here, but you'll have to be careful with it. I don't know how many details you left out, but based solely on this post, I can say that if not approached correctly it can lead readers to a great deal of confusion. <br /><br />For starters, when you said "all the girls are fused into the main plot", it can be interpreted as all the characters being present simultaneously, and the main character trying to deal with them almost all at once. This can be difficult to pull off effectively, and if you aren't careful this can destroy your story by creating group of events in which the character deals with each one too slowly, boiling the plot down to boring, monotonous crawl. <br /><br />It can also be interpreted as the very thing you're trying to avoid, which is having them appear in a sequential order, just like in common VN's. Unless you tread carefully, you'll essentially be forced to take this route for the story to make any sense. I think I understand what you're TRYING to get at, but to do it takes a bit of skill with storytelling.<br /><br />As for the concept of the story, seems interesting in theory. Main character messes her life up, and is trying to make amends by fixing the problem himself. This approach can be a bit precarious, as having too many characters in the supporting role can leave them underdeveloped, or too many main, but non-primary characters, can lead to a slew of characters that are underdeveloped. Or, a third scenario would be that if you try to develop all the characters too much, you can bog down the story with too much side-story and stray from the main plot a bit too far. <br /><br />The rest of the plot seems like pretty standard stuff. Not difficult to pull off by any means, and gives a good premise for a variety of different story scenarios with an easy base to work off of. The premise is structurally sound, if a bit cliched. Put some serious work into it, and you could have a decent story here.gmsephirothhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06361601402645794013noreply@blogger.com